Instead of the hollow and high sounding but empty and meaningless rhetoric and shibboleths in Tagore's poem, here is a poem I have composed which has real meaning for the Indian masses :
" Where children are not hungry and malnourished
Where no one is poor, and everyone enjoys a high standard of living
Where no one is unemployed
Where healthcare, good education and housing are available freely to everyone
Where scientific thinking is widespread, and superstition has disappeared
Where there is no discrimination against women, dalits, minorities or any section of Indian society
Where industry has become massive and is used for the benefit of the masses, not just to enrich a handful of people
Where social security is provided to the old, sick and disabled
Where more and more people are able to devote their time to genuinely creative scientific and artistic work
Where there is genuine democracy in society, and not just caste and religious vote banks to be cunningly manipulated and exploited by selfish, crafty politicians
Into that heaven of freedom, let my country awake "
